Hi, Stinky Face

Story ID:	1956
Written by:	Kristy Duggan (bio, link, contact, other stories)
Story type:	Family Memories
Writers Conference:	$500 2007 Family Memories Writing Project
Location:	Wichita KS USA
Year:	2007
Person:	my daughter, Kaci

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Posted 04/13/2007 07:35 by Carol J Garriott | Reply

Very funny, insightful story, Kristy. Love it. Carol

Posted 04/13/2007 08:41 by Kristy Duggan | Reply

I was thinking of submitting this story for the Chicken Soup for the Soul Adopted book but I'm not sure it's polished enough. I would love suggestions for how to make it more alive.

The joke of Kaci's comment seems a little lost in the bland descriptions but I'm not sure how to liven it up.

Posted 04/13/2007 10:21 by Cynthia Jo Ross | Reply

I love this story and at the moment can't think of a way to change it. Yes send it to the Chicken Soup!
Your stories are cute & corkee(can't find the right word or spelling for what I want to say)hummm

If you keep writing these little snippets you'll soon have your own book ready to publish.

Posted 04/15/2007 17:29 by Betty (BJ) Roan | Reply

What a great story. I laughed while reaching for the tissue box. BJ

Posted 04/17/2007 01:43 by Kristy Duggan | Reply

Does it hold the reader's interest long enough to get to the Stinky Face part?

Posted 04/17/2007 06:35 by Betty (BJ) Roan | Reply

There are too many stories on OurEcho to keep reading if one doesn't hold my interest. I read yours to the end. BJ

Posted 04/17/2007 08:34 by Kristy Duggan | Reply

thank you so much for all the feedback :)

Posted 05/14/2007 04:25 | Reply

Kristy, I love the way you write, but this is not my favorite among your wonderful stories here on Our Echo, because the 'stinky face' remark seems a bit unusual until the end when you explain it, even though young children often chime in with totally unexpected comments at inappropriate times. I'm hoping the judge eventually smiled and laughed, too, when he realized that Kaci's remark was not intended as an insult. Maybe ask Kathe Campbell to help you edit this a bit. That's my suggestion, since she has had numerous essays and stories published here and elsewhere, and knows what editors like.
Best of success to you always,
Sandi in FL.