ice storm

Story ID:	1313
Written by:	Gail Lee Martin (bio, contact, other stories)
Organization:	Kansas Authors Club
Story type:	Poem
Location:	Butler County Kansas USA
Year:	2006
Person:	Kansas Prairie

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Posted 12/04/2006 20:52 by Nancy J. Kopp | Reply

Hi Gail,

How about using the word "gale" in place of breeze? You're right about breeze being not quite right. Even "wind" would work better. Otherwise, the poem has some nice imagery.
Nancy

Posted 12/04/2006 22:26 by Kathleene S Baker | Reply

Gale came to my mind, too! I remember those gales well. It's still a beautiful poem....

Kathy Baker

Posted 12/05/2006 00:43 | Reply

How about, movement in the frozen drifts
Stately stalks of Bluestem grass
Shattered into icy shards like glass.

K.L.Farnum just a thought

Posted 12/05/2006 10:29 by Kathe M. Campbell | Reply

And with tried movement of the freeze,

Kath

Posted 12/06/2006 07:53 by Carol J Garriott | Reply

Makes me shiver! Carol

Posted 12/26/2007 12:25 by Gail Lee Martin | Reply

Still a work in progress as I have tried all your suggestions. Thanks so much. This poem fits Kansas weather again today and more coming in Friday. Gail